Friday, September 11, 2009

My window


The sunset blazed on flowing waters, and died away on the rising waves,

I watched the evening, fading away on the little, latticed window of pain.


Thanks to William Michaelian for making my poem look so much better now:

The sunset blazed on flowing waters
and died away on rising waves

I watched the evening fade away
on my little latticed window of pain.

3 comments:

William Michaelian said...

Nazia, thanks for the kind response to my meddling. It’s such a lovely little poem, as so many of your short ones are.

Happy birthday!

Nazia Mallick said...

Thank you William, for the birthday wish!

I loved your 'meddling' :)

It turned out so well, it has now- I am quoting you here: “ a harmony of meaning, sound, and visual arrangement.”

Thank you for liking the poem/poems.

William Michaelian said...

Thank you for writing them! And thanks for tracking down that interview. Sometimes the things I say make sense even after I say them — a pleasant surprise....